Miss Confection

[ChristopherSea]

What I don't like first...

'suspicious' adds nothing to 'razor-blade wafers' - 'cloying', possibly? - the last two lines.

What I do like

saffron > crocus > stigma... vanilla > orchid > blackened pod
the 3rd stanza really sticks in the throat - and I hope the eggs aren't off in the raw pastry - really good.
Cyanide and almonds - nice use of the words 'rumours' and 'whispered' leading to 'message deficient;

Spot on with 'unsavoury is the confection' - good juxtaposition - and the honeyed contempt is good - it's just, half cooked mince pie words? It's more Ms Direction... plus the meter drops and it kind of fizzles away.

Excuse my additional 'u's....

Jeremy, Thank you for taking the time to read this poem and share what worked and what was not up to snuff for you. Perhaps suspicious is not needed with razor-blade, originally I had razor-thin. Cloying was to contrast toxic and imply the over-sweetness is to cover up the poison within, but I shall give that another thought. Marzipan is a sticky confection made from almond paste. However, it is a raw one (not baked). I shall check the meter in the last stanza. You know, Ms Direction could capture the deceit theme better. I was thinking of something like misconception/Ms. Confection for word play and incorporation of the desert theme. Moreover, it was a play on mis-confection or a failed sweet. Much obliged for your critique. By the way, I love those British U's that add a bit of colour to certain words! Cheers/Chris