02-27-2014, 10:57 AM
When an odor holds
faster than gravestones,
not even a cross makes the dead
more present
I think that sounds nice. But I think it's obvious that a cross is weaker than a stench.
The poem is pretty good. Though it gets so melodramatic at the end.
faster than gravestones,
not even a cross makes the dead
more present
I think that sounds nice. But I think it's obvious that a cross is weaker than a stench.
The poem is pretty good. Though it gets so melodramatic at the end.