02-27-2014, 05:22 AM
Thank you for reading it 
I'll try to improve it. Just to be clear... the first line is ok(ish), and the rest is really cliche? I'll try and do it in a more original way
The freedom of the mind escapes me
Bound by the realism on which I rely
The paintbrush finds it's way to my hands
I turn yellows to blue, crisp lines become blurs
Light becomes dark, becomes nothing
My chance, fading
The canvas stays blank
A masterpiece, condemned to exist
In my mind. Forever
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Hmmm, better or worse? I tried to get some kind of metaphor going. You know at this stage i am not looking to make a masterpiece just get pointed in the right direction. Its not really something i know a lot about so just tell me exactly how it is (:
I'll try to improve it. Just to be clear... the first line is ok(ish), and the rest is really cliche? I'll try and do it in a more original wayThe freedom of the mind escapes me
Bound by the realism on which I rely
The paintbrush finds it's way to my hands
I turn yellows to blue, crisp lines become blurs
Light becomes dark, becomes nothing
My chance, fading
The canvas stays blank
A masterpiece, condemned to exist
In my mind. Forever
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Hmmm, better or worse? I tried to get some kind of metaphor going. You know at this stage i am not looking to make a masterpiece just get pointed in the right direction. Its not really something i know a lot about so just tell me exactly how it is (: