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[milo]

Thank you for your feedback. I believe I see your point. By leading with "Steel spikes," I may confuse the audience into thinking the "Steel spikes" are the subject throughout.

The subject is an individual, rather than steel spikes, making it probable/possible that they are living and confined.

ok, so a person is imprisoned in the clouds by these steel spikes?

Also, what is the difference between a vision of "pure" freedom and a vision of impure freedom?