On Break

On Break

Iowa
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02-25-2014, 11:07 AM

The final line is the most powerful language in the piece. I'm torn between thinking the line before needs to elevate to that power, and that the current line of truth juxtaposes the power and makes it so powerful.

Might be interesting to play with that second to last line.

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On Break - by kindofahippy - 02-20-2014, 02:41 AM

RE: On Break - by rowens - 02-20-2014, 06:37 AM

RE: On Break - by fresample - 02-21-2014, 08:05 AM

RE: On Break - by justcloudy - 02-21-2014, 08:08 AM

RE: On Break - by MadisonDiem - 02-21-2014, 10:27 AM

RE: On Break - by Iowa - 02-25-2014, 11:07 AM

RE: On Break - by tmonfort - 02-27-2014, 09:39 AM

RE: On Break - by cfgorman - 03-02-2014, 05:37 AM

RE: On Break - by ralex003 - 04-25-2014, 09:51 AM

RE: On Break - by Willpark - 04-28-2014, 11:21 AM

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