Spinning Tires (edit #2)

[ellajam]

It is a very well written poem, I see no mistakes with it. The only item that might be changed is in S1, L3. A period here instead of a comma, and make L4 a new line. This would add emphasis to the chill of winter.

Overall, an amusing poem in a rondeau form I didn't expect, I'm used to the limerick being used for the purpose. Thanks for the read!

Thank you for the punctuation help. It is appreciated, and in my case, usually sorely needed.

I am trying to learn the different forms and tend to use whatever happens to be on my mind to do it. This one has a lovely swing to it, the difficulty for me is to make the refrains work, if I do it here it is just barely.

Thanks so much for reading and for your suggestion.

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Drfifts amassed isn't working. Why not enjam on amassed?

Good idea, I'll give it a go. Thanks

Well, while you are at it, "white walls the gift of arctic blast" is awkward. I have some suggestions, but id rather read what you do with it.

(I think the inch rhymes are fine, btw)

Thanks for the heads up, I'll work on it.