A Pessimist's Orgasm

[Thatonegirl]

Oh yes, I like this one

It's very unlike the way I would format a poem, and I enjoy difference, especially because the form marries so well with the content. It does, however, make it a little more difficult for me to critique.

"because" works brilliantly -- it's not just the catchcry of the pessimist, but also of the procrastinator. Let us put the whole world as our obstacle -- that way, we will never be blamed for failure. It was just too big to overcome.

I am not entirely sold on "half-assed" as it seems out of place with the rest of the language, but that may just be a cultural difference.

And of course, the title is beautifully ironic. Thanks, I really enjoyed this.

Leanne, thank you very much for your kind words and your feedback. I changed the word from "quiet" to "half-assed" because it sort of fit in with the whole "I'm gonna do what I want/self-indulgent" attitude I was pitching at the time I wrote it. I may very well change it to something else. Thanks again for your time and your kind words!