Gawkers

[ChristopherSea]

Leanne, much obliged for the astute and detailed critique. I will work through those alternate punctuation suggestions and word deletions for brevity. Agreed, massive doesn't say much. I need a word for big and ugly. However, that may be accomplished by the next stanza. In last stanza and line, I was going for the cold cruelty of the pack, as well as the contrast of grandiose exhibition transitioning to emptiness. I can see how it marginalizes the victims. On the other hand, that is what the poem is all about. Nonetheless, I shall give the closing further inspection and see how to make it less anticlimatic. Perhaps simply, 'drain the scene lifeless' would work. 'Scene' would also fit the theatrical framework. Thanks for the read and advice! I should have a new edit up soon. Cheers/Chris