A weird attempt at free verse (I almost always rhyme)

[ChristopherSea]

"Blank Verse" is verse written in a metrical line (often in iambic pentameter as in Shakespearean plays) but lacking in rhyme. Free iambic verse has no designated line length and generally has some kind of rhyme, but the "free" comes from freedom from a static line length.

"LET us go then, you and I,
When the evening is spread out against the sky
Like a patient etherized upon a table;
Let us go, through certain half-deserted streets,
The muttering retreats"

-from The Love Song of J. Alfred Prufrock, T. S. Elliot

As you can see "I" and "Sky", as well as "streets" and "retreats" also rhyme. There is also the internal rhyme of "etherized", and the line length shifts from line to line. None of this is characteristic of "blank verse". Drop the 'First' it sounds too instructional.

HOWEVER: I wasn't even talking about free iambic verse, I was simply making the distinction between it and "free verse".

Dale

Much obliged for the explanation Dale!

Alatos, you have some good advice herein, especially for ruminants, vegans and Yoga enthusiasts! I immediately thought of a first person voice as well. It actually becomes less silly and more metaphorical that way. This was may favorite line:

Suck the dew off the tips of each blade. You are an infant, nursing.

Good luck with your next edit! Cheers/Chris