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On Break
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02-21-2014, 08:08 AM
I'm torn between wanting this poem to be longer and go further into the story, and wanting it to be much, much shorter. Could even be an interesting haiku maybe. As it is, the idea is there, but the execution is not. The last two lines are the most interesting, and I don't think it's a coincidence that they're also the shortest.
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On Break - by kindofahippy - 02-20-2014, 02:41 AM
RE: On Break - by rowens - 02-20-2014, 06:37 AM
RE: On Break - by fresample - 02-21-2014, 08:05 AM
RE: On Break - by justcloudy - 02-21-2014, 08:08 AM
RE: On Break - by MadisonDiem - 02-21-2014, 10:27 AM
RE: On Break - by Iowa - 02-25-2014, 11:07 AM
RE: On Break - by tmonfort - 02-27-2014, 09:39 AM
RE: On Break - by cfgorman - 03-02-2014, 05:37 AM
RE: On Break - by ralex003 - 04-25-2014, 09:51 AM
RE: On Break - by Willpark - 04-28-2014, 11:21 AM
RE: On Break - by Rustymetal - 01-28-2015, 05:13 PM
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