Evening Shower (for Tom)

[ChristopherSea]

"Dale, I too was wondering if you could do more with the shape of your piece to either look like a storm, a glass or a bottle of scotch. Here's the glass:"

Actually it's suppose to be a glass turned upside down because it is empty a it says in the poem

"my phrases were as empty as the glass
that held my last portion of Scotch"

A mushroom would be a good shape for Tom, except this is talking about Scotch, which he is also fond of, and he recently celebrated "Burns' night", where I think he consumed a tad of that beverage.

One thing I will put forth in my defense is I believe that when doing concrete poetry, a period, colon, et al should be at the end of the line. This makes creating the poem more challenging as the content has to work with the shape. Ignoring such constraints makes creating any shape extremely easy, but it is also disconnected from the content.

This was sort of the glass (image below) I was going for only upside down (not quite the same glass but roughly). It's the sort one might use when drinking a liquor without ice, instead of in a highball glass, at least where I am from (I did my stint as a bartender for about three years). Anyway that's why I choose that shape. I guess the idea that it was upside down because it was empty didn't come across very well.




Thanks for the comments and suggestions, it's nice to be part of stirring up the creative juices in others. Feel free to play with it all you want.

Dale

I understand your glass now! Again, nice poem and nod to Tom. Cheers/Chris