Damaged.

[5th Flow Boy]

You repetitions are over-used, the flow of the message is distorted with the continuation of verbiage so frequently.. I would suggest if this affect is what you are aiming to showcase, then spread out the usage within the stanza's. I would also suggest writing the poem in a standard 4 line delivery, it gives readers an idea of the flow in which you would desire them to follow as they read.

Hope this helped. I would like to see the revised version.