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Thank you for the feedback sorry this may sound like a dumb question, but how would I personalize it per say?

Hi, Love, welcome.

There are many ways you could approach this thought. One is to create a situation that expresses it without stating it, a picture that would bring us to your conclusion. Another is to come up with a metaphor that will do the same.

I suggest reading more poems, when you come across something that effects you in an Aha way, you'll get the idea. I find this site a good place to read because the critiques point out what works and why as well as what doesn't work and why not.

Again, welcome.

Thank you for the great feedback, I will definitely start reading more poetry on here! "create a situation that expresses it without stating it" - that's a hard concept :p could you give an example

Thank you so much!

Here's an example of a slice of life saying so much more.

justcloudy's Ghandhi's Shadow

Also, here's the link for how to post an edit