Driving Back to the Apartment (passanger seat)

Driving Back to the Apartment (passanger seat)

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02-16-2014, 09:07 AM

You have some good advice for your next edit. However, smoke drips is hard to reconcile. If the boyfriend is actually the black hole, what about closing with:

smoking black orifice,
you stare.

Good luck with your edit. Cheers/Chris

My new watercolor: 'Nightmare After Christmas'/Chris

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Driving Back to the Apartment (passanger seat) - by makeshift - 02-13-2014, 04:10 PM

RE: Driving Back to the Apartment (passanger seat) - by tomoffing - 02-13-2014, 09:29 PM

RE: Driving Back to the Apartment (passanger seat) - by Erthona - 02-13-2014, 11:35 PM

RE: Driving Back to the Apartment (passanger seat) - by makeshift - 02-14-2014, 12:52 AM

RE: Driving Back to the Apartment (passanger seat) - by PoetryAndPhysics - 02-14-2014, 12:34 PM

RE: Driving Back to the Apartment (passanger seat) - by visualcondyle - 02-15-2014, 01:08 PM

RE: Driving Back to the Apartment (passanger seat) - by ChristopherSea - 02-16-2014, 09:07 AM

RE: Driving Back to the Apartment (passanger seat) - by makeshift - 03-04-2014, 05:54 AM

RE: Driving Back to the Apartment (passanger seat) - by ChristopherSea - 03-04-2014, 06:09 AM

RE: Driving Back to the Apartment (passanger seat) - by beaufort - 03-04-2014, 06:52 AM

RE: Driving Back to the Apartment (passanger seat) - by 71degrees - 03-11-2014, 08:31 AM

RE: Driving Back to the Apartment (passanger seat) - by makeshift - 03-11-2014, 05:38 AM

RE: Driving Back to the Apartment (passanger seat) - by jeremyyoung - 03-11-2014, 07:46 AM

RE: Driving Back to the Apartment (passanger seat) - by makeshift - 03-11-2014, 03:16 PM

RE: Driving Back to the Apartment (passanger seat) - by jeremyyoung - 03-11-2014, 05:31 PM

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