02-16-2014, 03:40 AM
"Tractor diesel and cut alfalfa bring her to the edge, I disagree about needing to tell the reader it is a smell under discussion."
I would agree with cidermaid if "tractor' was dropped from the line.
"diesel and cut alfalfa bring her to the edge",
diesel is diesel, it doesn't matter what one puts it in, adding tractor to the equation has nothing to do with smelling the diesel, thus I focused on this strange hybrid and what it's particular aspects were, and smell was way down the list. If you were to drop tractor from the line I would agree that one doesn't need to introduce the idea of smell as it would be inferred.
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Best,
Dale
I would agree with cidermaid if "tractor' was dropped from the line.
"diesel and cut alfalfa bring her to the edge",
diesel is diesel, it doesn't matter what one puts it in, adding tractor to the equation has nothing to do with smelling the diesel, thus I focused on this strange hybrid and what it's particular aspects were, and smell was way down the list. If you were to drop tractor from the line I would agree that one doesn't need to introduce the idea of smell as it would be inferred.
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Best,
Dale
How long after picking up the brush, the first masterpiece?
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.