United Within

[Love]

Here's an example of an inspired poem that doesn't carry. It's like you're screaming pretension. I say keep the topic of social injustice, but write something more personal. Something striking to you. This poem is overgeneralized and comes off bleak.

Can't wait to see what you come up with,
Sandra

Thank you for the feedback sorry this may sound like a dumb question, but how would I personalize it per say?