fowl nest

[Truerenigma]

I'm afraid this reads as just another adolescent's ennui in their first blush of gainful employment. It is the old "cog-in-the-wheel-we-are
ground-down by the machine
of meaninglessness" dystopia with a farm instead of a machine. Orwell did it better without all of the alliterative nonsense. There is not much here that I find interesting. You would do better to lose the nonsense, and just write of the farm, the metaphor by itself, leaving the office to the reader—and out of the poem.

Noted and appreciated. It's the office I'm after though so I'll go the opposite direction I think.
thanks
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That could probably work too, if you keep the thoughts original, and specific to the scene.