Gawkers

[ChristopherSea]

Chris2fur

It is rare that I don't find something I would correct on the first read, but that is true here...as regards the poem itself. I would change the title to "Gawkers" (purely stylistic, but the sound of "gawkers" reminds me of crows). Loved the Tom Robbins allusion. Really a very good write.

Dale

Thank you very much for your time and critique Dale. I have edited this thing to death over a couple months and was afraid that I might have over-worked it. I am glad a fresh view says that it reads well. I do like your suggestion for the title. Gapers came about from the traffic term 'Gaper-block. 'Gawkers' with that crow connotation brings out the scavenger theme better. I shall most likely change it! Cheers/Chris