Bullets of the Mind

[ChristopherSea]

Mike, I like the metaphor of thoughts as bullets. They can be precisely aimed with specific targets or they can be random discharges, but still with high consequence. I would attempt a re-write here with these analogies in mind. There are too many ambiguous lines herein, as well as contradictions. One could argue that bullets have a vector direction and velocity as instruction. Their intention becomes that of the gunman essentially, unless it is an accidental discharge. Random seems wrong, as does harmless. Hollywood turmoil looks pretty chaotic to outsiders. I could go on. My advice is to give the poem another shot (pun intended)with the 'on target' thought/bullet metaphor, but with a theme that does not misfire. Good luck with your edit. Cheers/Chris