I Do Not Miss the Time That I Have Lost
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There is both good and bad here. At the best it reminds me of "Rumi",

"I do not miss the time that I have lost
forever, looking in your playful eyes "

at the worst is such things as the forced rhyme of "patronize".


dale
How long after picking up the brush, the first masterpiece?

The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.
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RE: I Do Not Miss the Time That I Have Lost - by just mercedes - 02-08-2014, 04:54 AM
RE: I Do Not Miss the Time That I Have Lost - by Erthona - 02-08-2014, 06:30 AM
RE: I Do Not Miss the Time That I Have Lost - by micpschm - 04-10-2014, 11:53 PM
RE: I Do Not Miss the Time That I Have Lost - by aniketk - 04-11-2014, 04:48 AM



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