02-08-2014, 02:59 AM
Thank you all for your kind, honest and in-depth feedback. I've read each comment and like a lot of your suggestions, particularly those involving personification and objectivity. I wrote this one on a bit of scrap paper to relax my brain while in college, then edited it later. Thank you again for your thoughtful comments; I do appreciate them
"We believe that we invent symbols. The truth is that they invent us; we are their creatures, shaped by their hard, defining edges." - Gene Wolfe

