02-07-2014, 08:12 PM
I like it, it reminded me of the stories about Arthur Pendragon.
As I'm also very much new to letting other people read what I wrote, I don't know much about giving critique. But I do agree with most of what Ralex003 said about the commas, but I also understand why you wrote them.
As I'm also very much new to letting other people read what I wrote, I don't know much about giving critique. But I do agree with most of what Ralex003 said about the commas, but I also understand why you wrote them.