The Little Things

The Little Things

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02-03-2014, 03:05 PM

I agree with Dale, though I might even exclude the last 4 lines and end with "in a few short minutes, they will depart." I think their mortality might better be expressed without the lines following, if that is in fact what you are going for. Great read Smile

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The Little Things - by 71degrees - 02-03-2014, 02:37 AM

RE: The Little Things - by Erthona - 02-03-2014, 04:52 AM

RE: The Little Things - by 71degrees - 02-04-2014, 02:18 AM

RE: The Little Things - by just mercedes - 02-09-2014, 10:00 AM

RE: The Little Things - by Humbert - 02-03-2014, 03:05 PM

RE: The Little Things - by makeshift - 02-07-2014, 03:50 PM

RE: The Little Things - by 71degrees - 02-09-2014, 12:59 AM

RE: The Little Things - by justcloudy - 02-09-2014, 09:19 AM

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RE: The Little Things - by visualcondyle - 02-15-2014, 05:20 AM

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