Two Eggs

[tomoffing]

Hey shenaz,

While I'm a usually a fan of short pieces, you are lacking some impact here.
Your repetitions are a little jarring in such a short piece. ("Two", "Heat" "round")
Your two eggs image is also drawing me the conclusion that this is a lesbian encounter. Is that the intention?

You've got a nice idea here but some more variation will add a lot.

Thanks for the read,
t

Two eggs in the pot
Two nice round eggs nice is bland and eggs aren't round
The water is hot and the heat is on one half of this line is redundant, if the water is hot, we can assume the heat is on, and vice versa
We splutter and curdle this is my favorite line. my only issue being that if there is curdling im assuming an egg has cracked and the white is in the water?? theres no other allusion to this so im left a little confused
Two round eggs
In the heat of the moment this is cliched