02-03-2014, 07:16 AM
6 lines. 3 of them beginning with "two" feels forced, repetitive. Maybe try L1: Two eggs in the pot, L2: nice round eggs < Or try rewriting L5: These round eggs. Either way, I enjoyed it!
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RE: Two Eggs - by Malu - 09-14-2013, 03:29 AM
RE: Two Eggs - by shenaz - 09-14-2013, 03:31 AM
RE: Two Eggs - by Malu - 09-14-2013, 04:01 AM
RE: Two Eggs - by shenaz - 09-14-2013, 04:05 AM
RE: Two Eggs - by Snowbells - 09-14-2013, 09:17 AM
RE: Two Eggs - by shenaz - 09-14-2013, 05:23 PM
RE: Two Eggs - by nhanna1223 - 02-03-2014, 02:11 AM
RE: Two Eggs - by shenaz - 02-03-2014, 06:05 AM
RE: Two Eggs - by LickinLyrics - 02-03-2014, 07:16 AM
RE: Two Eggs - by tomoffing - 02-03-2014, 07:56 AM
RE: Two Eggs - by DominoMan - 02-03-2014, 02:41 PM
RE: Two Eggs - by kingmicahde - 02-07-2014, 07:26 AM
RE: Two Eggs - by shenaz - 02-08-2014, 02:12 AM
RE: Two Eggs - by kingmicahde - 02-08-2014, 04:31 AM
RE: Two Eggs - by shenaz - 02-08-2014, 03:58 PM
RE: Two Eggs - by Sheep - 02-11-2014, 06:29 PM
RE: Two Eggs - by shenaz - 02-12-2014, 03:17 AM
RE: Two Eggs - by cfgorman - 03-01-2014, 01:27 PM
RE: Two Eggs - by shenaz - 03-02-2014, 05:46 AM
RE: Two Eggs - by Izo - 03-15-2014, 07:56 PM
RE: Two Eggs - by WordJunky - 03-16-2014, 08:29 PM
RE: Two Eggs - by Babeanew - 04-04-2014, 09:17 AM
RE: Two Eggs - by Mopkins - 04-06-2014, 02:10 PM
RE: Two Eggs - by California - 04-07-2014, 07:40 PM
RE: Two Eggs - by kindofahippy - 04-08-2014, 12:23 AM
RE: Two Eggs - by Robert9614 - 04-22-2014, 08:35 AM
RE: Two Eggs - by Willpark - 04-29-2014, 12:54 PM
RE: Two Eggs - by RiverNotch - 04-29-2014, 06:17 PM
RE: Two Eggs - by constellation - 04-30-2014, 07:36 AM
RE: Two Eggs - by shenaz - 05-01-2014, 09:27 AM
RE: Two Eggs - by bbcashdollar - 05-12-2014, 06:03 AM
RE: Two Eggs - by SuicidalBlueJay - 05-12-2014, 11:22 AM
RE: Two Eggs - by newsclippings - 05-12-2014, 11:38 AM
RE: Two Eggs - by Igor - 02-28-2016, 11:06 AM
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