Case. And Buzz

[Swoonjet]

Hi, swoon, this is a fun read.

I think you got off to a bad start with "horses brown", the rest of the poem shows that you can do better, and the meter seemed off to me in L5, I wanted to say "His bowler bent down towards his eyes", but that may just be me.

I don't know what you gain by letting me in on the case/buzz thing.

Great images, you addressed all my senses, all in all an enjoyable read.

Cool. Thanks for reading.

I guess the L5 thing depends how you pronounce or stress the word "toward".

The case buzz thing was just context. Not that it matters. Wasn't trying to gain anything. All in all, glad you found it enjoyable.