01-31-2014, 02:46 AM
Well "do it" is also an allusion to the Beatles "Why Don't We Do It In The Road.
Looking back over it there are some tense problems, that might help to clear it up.
So how would you write this sentence where it makes more sense to you?
I changed some things and put in parenthesis some things that might help clarify (or not)
(The)Vibratory verve of the alto sax expelled coercively from asthmatic lungs, frenetically floats buoyed on the singing of las lenguas de chicas bonitas, (the singing and the sax are) humping that Brazilian Basso Nova bass line, which bound off garden walls as ivies climb up the pulsing beat (of the bass) to the stars, then (the music) falls out towards diagonally parked cars where Congress and Mary Street do it in the road.
Thanks for your help,
Dale
Looking back over it there are some tense problems, that might help to clear it up.
So how would you write this sentence where it makes more sense to you?
I changed some things and put in parenthesis some things that might help clarify (or not)
(The)Vibratory verve of the alto sax expelled coercively from asthmatic lungs, frenetically floats buoyed on the singing of las lenguas de chicas bonitas, (the singing and the sax are) humping that Brazilian Basso Nova bass line, which bound off garden walls as ivies climb up the pulsing beat (of the bass) to the stars, then (the music) falls out towards diagonally parked cars where Congress and Mary Street do it in the road.
Thanks for your help,
Dale
How long after picking up the brush, the first masterpiece?
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.