01-31-2014, 02:29 AM
Charlie stood in my first wedding--and they might have mentioned Getz a time or two over at Berklee--but the sentence is awful. The personification is unclear. The very long initial thought is never completed. The verb + object, IMO the most important part of an "active" sentence, is practically ignored: do you think that the fact that "do it" could be taken to mean sex makes it thoughtful and clever? I don't. To me clever would be choosing from thousands of candidates the only verb which perfectly explicates your intentions--and then, and only then, leaves room for allegory.