01-30-2014, 07:32 AM
I love your poem. It flowed really well and the idea, in general, just struck me. There are a couple lines I'd change: "the blue of monsters" & "curving veins along a fat girl's thigh." Maybe for the second, you could use "the veins of a heroine addict" or some variation of it? It might go along with the dark blue theme well.
Again, I really enjoyed this. Great job!
Again, I really enjoyed this. Great job!

