01-28-2014, 11:54 PM
I think you could change this and make to more proper, but I don't think the person saying it would speak it other than it is. That's regards to 1 stanza, as it may be grammatically improper, but it is still intelligible. The second stanzas is more problematic because it is difficult to understand due to the tense change.
Keeping with the feel of the 1st stanza:
I've said before I settle down,
I'd pretend to love and hid my frown,
then wrinkle up and die of cold old age.
Dale
Keeping with the feel of the 1st stanza:
I've said before I settle down,
I'd pretend to love and hid my frown,
then wrinkle up and die of cold old age.
Dale
How long after picking up the brush, the first masterpiece?
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.