Star Crossed Inuit

[Truerenigma]

Did write is metrically correct (though a trochee) but an obvious act of.desperation. you don't really see the old "did (verb)" in sonnets anymore.

The metrical problems are elsewhere.

Did write is a more grotesque version of leannes had have and my "and so he"

iamb trochee, its all the same thing these days. considering the rest of the old english did write kinda fits anyway. not to say the poem is worth a hoot.

I will submit mine as "publication ready" to that ezine that was fishing for submissions earlier.

You should, I am going to submit my sonnet(which scans fine) as well. Yours has a better chance though, you get extra points for the plains plain and flow flow wordplay.