My Hand Knows the Way to the Blade

[milo]

Without the hyphen it becomes the eqivalent of ice ice. Is this intentional? The term 'ice floe' is common; that's why I used it.

Also is the lava owning narrator in iceland at the time of this poem? I can't think where else lava owners would run into ice owners. I feel this type of background detail isn't necessary, given that 'ice floe' and 'lava' are used metaphorically.

And you are wrong about the almost nothing. It's subjective. For me it was almost nothing. I gave you enough to improve your poem. Along with newsclippings, indeed you helped confirm what I already knew - that those lines were among the weakest, and would need re-visiting. When I posted, I'd hoped for direction similar to what I give when I critique. But I'll figure it out.

Is this a new metaphor of a couple that are like fire and ice? That's great, I wish i'd thought of that. Still I guess I could write a poem about an inuk romance where a literal lava owner meets a literal ice owner.

Maybe someone else will come by and point out other things more in the style that you like and you can use those instead.