My Hand Knows the Way to the Blade

[milo]

Milo, you’re making an assumption. The time taken to write the poem was considerably longer than it took you to type three letters. The original piece was much longer; I’ve gradually whittled it down to its current length.

I can live happily with ‘ugh’, but feel it’s only half of a serious critique. I’m interested in knowing what aspect of the poem works, what doesn’t, and what might be the best way to approach a revision.

Regarding 'floes': A 'floe' is a flat mass of floating ice.

Newsclippings, thank you for your comments/suggestions on the poem. I've taken these on board.

Donna

I don't want to spend more time than it took to write the poem.

Ok if a floe is ice, what is an ice-floe?

(Half a critique is better than none, I always say)