01-26-2014, 02:05 AM
Milo, you’re making an assumption. The time taken to write the poem was considerably longer than it took you to type three letters. 
The original piece was much longer; I’ve gradually whittled it down to its current length.
I can live happily with ‘ugh’ - I agree the lines are cliche and are best being replaced - but feel it’s only half of a serious critique. I’m interested in knowing what aspect of the poem works, what doesn’t, and what might be the best way to approach a revision.
Regarding 'floes': A 'floe' is a flat mass of floating ice.
Newsclippings, thank you for your comments/suggestions on the poem. I've taken these on board.
Donna
The original piece was much longer; I’ve gradually whittled it down to its current length.I can live happily with ‘ugh’ - I agree the lines are cliche and are best being replaced - but feel it’s only half of a serious critique. I’m interested in knowing what aspect of the poem works, what doesn’t, and what might be the best way to approach a revision.
Regarding 'floes': A 'floe' is a flat mass of floating ice.
Newsclippings, thank you for your comments/suggestions on the poem.
I've taken these on board. Donna
(01-26-2014, 01:51 AM)milo Wrote: I don't want to spend more time than it took to write the poem.
Honour the Earth. Without it, we'd be nowhere.