Tired

Tired

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01-26-2014, 01:51 AM

Yeah, the switch in tense is a bit abrupt. I agree about the "I'll" thing, but the only way I can think to change it is to switch the "I'll" to "and" and then there's too many "ands" all bunched up for my taste.

Thanks for reading.

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Tired - by Wjames - 01-25-2014, 09:14 AM

RE: Tired - by just mercedes - 01-25-2014, 09:51 AM

RE: Tired - by Wjames - 01-26-2014, 01:51 AM

RE: Tired - by beaufort - 01-26-2014, 07:46 AM

RE: Tired - by tomoffing - 01-28-2014, 11:21 AM

RE: Tired - by Erthona - 01-28-2014, 11:54 PM

RE: Tired - by alexanjah1 - 01-29-2014, 01:46 AM

RE: Tired - by Zainabk - 01-29-2014, 11:11 AM

RE: Tired - by Humbert - 02-02-2014, 11:44 AM

RE: Tired - by LickinLyrics - 02-02-2014, 07:52 PM

RE: Tired - by Alex13 - 02-18-2014, 10:44 AM

RE: Tired - by alatos - 02-21-2014, 12:47 PM

RE: Tired - by Bahdriel - 02-27-2014, 01:32 AM

RE: Tired - by 1skylande1 - 03-23-2014, 03:14 PM

RE: Tired - by denniswilson - 04-07-2014, 05:32 AM

RE: Tired - by Willpark - 04-28-2014, 11:34 AM

RE: Tired - by RiverNotch - 04-28-2014, 09:50 PM

RE: Tired - by moniker - 04-29-2014, 10:11 AM

RE: Tired - by Wjames - 04-29-2014, 10:38 AM

RE: Tired - by aerickson - 04-30-2014, 01:53 AM

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