My Hand Knows the Way to the Blade

[milo]

I feel it is sufficient. Do you have any suggestions on how to improve? (My critique, of course)

You need to expand on your thought process and maybe give insight as to why these particular phrases make you say "ugh."

The author put it in serious critique, but I think they would best benefit with mild for this one.

I think reading the phrases makes it obvious - it is in serious after all. I don't want to spend more time than it took to write the poem.

Did you see what I meant by the critique?