A Girl of Can't
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I agree with billy's post, in that your poem would be stronger if some of the repetitive words were edited. But, you do a good job of showing how impactful our physical appearance can be on the rest of our life, regardless of how well we're doing in other aspects.

I really like "I can't be in group photos; because I am the least beautiful friend." It goes a bit deeper by showing how relationships are being affected. Being envious of or not good enough for others.
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A Girl of Can't - by penguingina - 01-22-2014, 02:06 PM
RE: A Girl of Can't - by billy - 01-22-2014, 04:19 PM
RE: A Girl of Can't - by clemonz - 01-22-2014, 04:34 PM
RE: A Girl of Can't - by nicksherman - 01-25-2014, 01:28 AM
RE: A Girl of Can't - by Zainabk - 01-29-2014, 11:32 AM



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