experimenting with self expression...

[clemonz]

i want critique, but you can move it to novice if you wish.

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The beautiful simplicity of psychosis,
idle composure stirred with tears like hot spring rain. .

My stream of thoughts all of them wrong
Prefix all words with NOISE,

Day 1
Poetry > Noise.

kinergikhash

YOU MUST FIRST, WEEP...

i'll add an mp3

sorry if this is the wrong forum for my confused poems...

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not comfortable with the second line, but i'd like advice please

FTR the last statement is a quotation !