Coming of Age, Again (Give an Inch) edit #4.1

[ellajam]

I don't much about poetry since I'm just starting out my self. But I enjoyed this a lot. I think some words should be cut off like the "while' part but this was good altogether.

Hi, Dru, welcome. Do you think the whole line is off or just the "while"?

Thanks for reading and giving me your input.

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You're right about that "while", Dale, it's something I never would have done before I started playing iamb. I'm going to try to edit keeping rhythm and IT. Why? Oh, I don't know, why not?