Coming of Age, Again (Give an Inch) edit #4.1

[milo]

I love reading sonnets here!
The meter is tetrameter. Needs to be pentameter.

Besides that, I think that in the Shakespearean sonnets, the final couplet needs to be its own sentence or sentences. I think yours did a good job of concluding the poem, but try putting a period at the end of line 12 and try something like
"So now with grace old age bequeaths"
so the couplet has its own complete sentence.

Ha, that's what I had but changed it. Think I'll clean this up, change title to "song" and start a tetrameter. Thanks for reading and the good advice.

Well, you never have to /call/ it a sonnet either way but there is certainly nothing wrong with a sonnet in IT. I have written sonnets in almost every meter you could think of. I will check back later with other comments.