01-22-2014, 09:58 AM
Oooh, I like #3, nice job. The one word line "becomes" is the only off point for me, I'd drop it to the line below, but still, really well done, I'm glad you added winter back in, I missed it. 
Oops, I got confused, I was addressing the top, original? I'm confused, haven't read it in a few days. It was in 3 that I felt the loss of winter. I haven't read 3 enough yet, I'm not ready to give an opinion on "interlude", but can we have winter without the numerous snowflakes? Asking too much?
Oops, I got confused, I was addressing the top, original? I'm confused, haven't read it in a few days. It was in 3 that I felt the loss of winter. I haven't read 3 enough yet, I'm not ready to give an opinion on "interlude", but can we have winter without the numerous snowflakes? Asking too much?
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