Arrivederci e Grazie (edit 1: Rowens, tomoffing)
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Quote:All the things I can't say I drink
Golden Monkeys in plastic silence, I
miss those I never knew--

and just like you I find
debilitation more warming than
parents decorating trees for their son who
stalks longboards on Broadway and
Fifth.
i find the bit in bold appealing, but don't really understand why you wrote it like that - assuming they are three distinct clauses.

?

the second stanza makes me think they're having sex on your desk, which is confusing, but i'll take your word for it.
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RE: Arrivederci e Grazie - by rowens - 01-21-2014, 07:41 AM
RE: Arrivederci e Grazie - by tomoffing - 01-21-2014, 09:06 AM
RE: Arrivederci e Grazie - by newsclippings - 01-21-2014, 01:01 PM
RE: Arrivederci e Grazie (edit 1: Rowens, tomoffing) - by rowens - 01-22-2014, 02:33 AM
RE: Arrivederci e Grazie (edit 1: Rowens, tomoffing) - by clemonz - 01-22-2014, 05:57 AM
RE: Arrivederci e Grazie (edit 1: Rowens, tomoffing) - by Sequel - 01-28-2014, 02:58 AM



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