01-21-2014, 04:18 PM
i enjoyed the poem but not the line breaks.
i'm probably way off the mark here but the poem has a sexual connotation for me;
my lover has
forgotten the words
and I am left to hum
only the melody
the spider door images are good. there's a sense of being trapped in them.
i wish i could give a more helpful crit
i'm probably way off the mark here but the poem has a sexual connotation for me;
my lover has
forgotten the words
and I am left to hum
only the melody
the spider door images are good. there's a sense of being trapped in them.
i wish i could give a more helpful crit