Fatherhood (Edit 3)

[kingmicahde]

Hey this is a very interesting poem I actually could somewhat relate to. I like the flow of S1 I seen where you was getting at from S2 but it didn't really flow like S1 did to me and S3 the first lines I like "We require our worlds be turned upside down Before we can see they are right-side up" I did not really like the second half of if rewording might work. I would definately go with "Tomorrow in between S2 and S3 These are just my opinion. Hope to help