01-03-2010, 12:20 PM
I like it. Very evocative.
Just a minor quibble; in the last stanza, I found "glitter-ball night" to be a rather distracting image, that didn't fit perfectly in with the rest of the images. Also, I really feel I might be missing the significance of that one-line stanza, "nature drops a stitch", and why its separated/ what meaning it drives, because to me it seems like the least evocative line, yet its highlighted.
Just a minor quibble; in the last stanza, I found "glitter-ball night" to be a rather distracting image, that didn't fit perfectly in with the rest of the images. Also, I really feel I might be missing the significance of that one-line stanza, "nature drops a stitch", and why its separated/ what meaning it drives, because to me it seems like the least evocative line, yet its highlighted.
PS. If you can, try your hand at giving some of the others a bit of feedback. If you already have, thanks, can you do some more?