The night you taught me anarchy

[jdelacroix]

Very cool poem . Just some of my thoughts.

Remember the night I'm not sure it's necesary for you to frame the poem like this, with a reminiscing "Remember when..?" line; [you can keep it, but I think it's superfluous to the point of the poem, since you can tell the story well enough without it.
you bore anarchy in my head?
Your drunk guitar teacher
on stage begged me
to watch over you
in that jam-packed bolgia.

The tobacco fog permeated the air.
The fiends around us,
in black shirts and tattered jeans,
raised their pitchfork fingers:
in the name of sex, drugs and rock n’ roll. I think since the piece is alreadyt titled Rock Show, this line comes off as a little obvious. Replace it with a more unique line.

Yet,
your heart lingered maybe 'lingered' isn't the word you meant; I know linger means to stay, so I don't quite understand what this means
at the noise: of guitars
screeching from the amplifiers,
and cymbals crashing
like shattered bottles
on concrete.

You were barely 16
sipping your can of soda,
exclaiming to me
your view of anarchy.
“Can you see it now?
Amidst the chaos sprouts a rose!”

I stood still. not the strongest line for me, not sure why. I think it's because I had no idea what you were actually doing before she stunned you to silence. Were you dancing or thrashing? Were you even standing?If I imagined in my head that you were already standing still then the line doesn't have the same impact.
All I saw was you.

You'll have to wait for Billy's critique. He's on a trrip right now and it'll take a while for him to get on a computer again

Overall nice job!

Hey Addy! Thanks 4 d the critique. Told ya I wasn't sure with this one hahahaha. Anyways I'll edit and wait 4 billy's return some other time. Im working (