01-18-2014, 10:41 PM
MM,
Although you do not make the connection per se, there is the implication that Gabriel is a seraphim, which he is not. The seraphim are fire angels and spend most of their time it seems hanging about the throne of God while singing :Holy, holy, holy".
To me it seems you have just used the word in an ad hoc sort of way to mean angle. This is fine by me, it's even fine if you wish to use the word seraphim, but I think maybe you need to give a backstory, or at the least a passing mention of why/how they fell from their exalted position, as well as how has their fire dimmed so much (A major trait of the seraphim). When modernism took over the Western world, and for all intents and purposes declared God dead, there was this sort of archetypal void created about how to deal with his helpers, both angelic and mortal, so I see no problem with a little myth-making to help fill that void, but I do think you need have more consistency with what has gone before, or at least give an explanation about why what we thought or were told of these beings was in some respect a lie, or that somehow we were misinformed. It is like all of a sudden saying, well "Satan was actually a good angle and you should listen to him now". No, you would need to build some kind of a bridge from what everyone generally thinks of him, to transform him into the new good Satan. Such as the real bad angles had gotten a hold of the angelic PR department and did a hatchet job on this guy, when really he was on our side all along.
So a little backstory if you please, otherwise your story lacks a certain credibility...well, as least for me, but then again I am old, but old or not, I really do believe that what a person writes must be believable at a basic level for it to work, .
Dale
Although you do not make the connection per se, there is the implication that Gabriel is a seraphim, which he is not. The seraphim are fire angels and spend most of their time it seems hanging about the throne of God while singing :Holy, holy, holy".
To me it seems you have just used the word in an ad hoc sort of way to mean angle. This is fine by me, it's even fine if you wish to use the word seraphim, but I think maybe you need to give a backstory, or at the least a passing mention of why/how they fell from their exalted position, as well as how has their fire dimmed so much (A major trait of the seraphim). When modernism took over the Western world, and for all intents and purposes declared God dead, there was this sort of archetypal void created about how to deal with his helpers, both angelic and mortal, so I see no problem with a little myth-making to help fill that void, but I do think you need have more consistency with what has gone before, or at least give an explanation about why what we thought or were told of these beings was in some respect a lie, or that somehow we were misinformed. It is like all of a sudden saying, well "Satan was actually a good angle and you should listen to him now". No, you would need to build some kind of a bridge from what everyone generally thinks of him, to transform him into the new good Satan. Such as the real bad angles had gotten a hold of the angelic PR department and did a hatchet job on this guy, when really he was on our side all along.
So a little backstory if you please, otherwise your story lacks a certain credibility...well, as least for me, but then again I am old, but old or not, I really do believe that what a person writes must be believable at a basic level for it to work, .
Dale
How long after picking up the brush, the first masterpiece?
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.