01-18-2014, 05:04 AM
Thank you for the advise I definately will work on it like I said I don't like the second stanza at all I think it needs a transition and needs to be better over all I am not sure about being a slave being our choice thing because I want to infer that there is a certain selct few people that own the worlds money and that we all work for them even our managers they are always slaves to the master that they don't even know even some CEO's really exist to make money for the higher up I tdont know how to convey it