Out of the labyrinth
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(01-14-2014, 09:18 AM)Keith Wrote:  I drowned crystal cerulean,
whitewashed days away,
heavy on the oceans bight,
a fallen feathered stray.

Tar stains on my back
cannot blemish me,
wax runs red to legs,
the sun has set me free.
I find it odd that the bolded words do not rhyme while the rest of the piece does. Was this intentional, or were you simply trying to avoid using a forced rhyme? I enjoyed reading this though, very nice.
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Out of the labyrinth - by Keith - 01-14-2014, 09:18 AM
RE: Out of the labyrinth - by milo - 01-14-2014, 11:22 AM
RE: Out of the labyrinth - by Keith - 01-14-2014, 11:11 PM
RE: Out of the labyrinth - by ChristopherSea - 01-14-2014, 11:21 PM
RE: Out of the labyrinth - by Keith - 01-15-2014, 06:49 AM
RE: Out of the labyrinth - by Blake - 01-16-2014, 05:15 AM
RE: Out of the labyrinth - by Keith - 01-16-2014, 08:28 AM
RE: Out of the labyrinth - by Blake - 01-15-2014, 02:50 AM
RE: Out of the labyrinth - by Codry - 01-15-2014, 11:55 PM
RE: Out of the labyrinth - by Keith - 01-16-2014, 04:59 AM
RE: Out of the labyrinth - by rowens - 01-15-2014, 11:57 PM
RE: Out of the labyrinth - by ChristopherSea - 01-16-2014, 05:20 AM
RE: Out of the labyrinth - by YouAreMe - 01-16-2014, 11:28 AM
RE: Out of the labyrinth - by Keith - 01-20-2014, 10:38 AM



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