To: All the Girls

[teejai]

Perhaps I read it entirely wrong but I thought it was about rape at first and not till the end did I realize it was about aging and the obsession with self beauty in women. The scheme itself appeared to be more of a song in my head but aloud it was rather off putting. I think if rewritten, perhaps spread things out slightly and add a few more lines to make a little more sense and the ending in itself needs to be finalized. It didn't have an impact at the end, unlike the rest of the work. Thanks for sharing though, much appreciated